My first song! Please be honest and comment!

This is my first song. Roughly 3/4 of it is freestyle, roughly 1/4 was written while I was bored on a plane. For some reason I find it much easier to diss people or rap about weed while freestyling.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u_JUYJdf_J4

Feedback and suggestions are highly appreciated. Thanks!

By the way, I didn't have any real pictures that would suit the song so I just drew one of Mac Dre real quick

the flow is a bit off but however on the bright side some of ur punch lines are good but u need to flow much better than that.

Yeah I hear you there but the thing is I sang the entire song uncut so there's a couple of misses in my flow since I was reading the lyrics off a document. It probably took me 60 tries to get the whole thing without any stutters or other slipups

thats real my nigga practice makes perfect

Your doing your thing yo, Dedication, Determination, and DIscipline homey!!! It took you sixty shots to get the joint the way u wanted it then u was willing to go at it that many times. That speaks measures of a mans character!!! Real Talk! Keep GRINDING out HIP HOP!!!!

hahahaha. dat lil nigga got a a sailor hat on! hahaha.wit no shirt on hahaha. why da fuck u put a lame ass picture on here with yo shirt off nigga?