wat up yo!! im new to da forum..so just make a diss or give me tips, to get betta, theirs always room for improvement!!

yo im new,but with yo head im a screw
with this shit im spittin, i aint neva quittin
im a pimp us a hoe, so shut up n blow some mo
if u fuck up, im a smack yo face up
like Chris did Rihanna
u gonna, run a, home to ur momma
i aint here to beef.
im just showin ya wat i got
but if u diss me, im a pull out my glock
im just a homie from east LA
i come in rappin, slappin, n strappin
watchu know about nines's, AK's, n AR-15's
us a bitch ass boy only in his 16's
fuck it! im not gonna keep wastin my time,
accept it, u got a weak ass rhyme
that was my intro, im done n im a go
thats wat im about, peace n im out!


yea that was me, spittin that shit...haha
i think im an ok rapper, if i can call myself avrapper yet..
heyn i like advice, so give me some feed back!!

daniel8, with u seventytwo seconds and i'll be thru
cant take me down even with ur whole crew
the rap hulk so watch me smash
my fists and ur faces r about ta crash
leavin u all red somthin like a rash
leave u on the floor, without ur cash or ur stash
standin above ove, i'll smoke ur hash
and in ur eyeball i will ash
cuz u aint ntn but todays forum trash

aight aight...that was ok
but leave that shit for another day
cuz today we do this my way
u wanna beef wit me, really?
u working at piggly wiggly
makin da minimum wage
u lookin up at me on da stage
im makin da dough, da mula, da monies
im gettin the honeys
u must a fucked up when u said 72 secs
u must a meant years
ill rain ur ass down with a thousand spears
an when this beef clears, im aleave u with fears
of me coming at cha, if on da street i catcha
im a smoke u with my gat, in ur ass im a bust a cap
im reppin south thirteen, u aint neva seen
a vato like me, ill fuck ur face up b


hey tell me fo real ese..am i good??

fuk a scrap
set foot in my city and u'll b in a trap
surrounded by red everywhere u c
im talkin bout ur worst nightmare b
jus a phone call away leave u bloodied on the floor
got north side connects that bang like a door
quit spittin u wannabe cholo
rob u clean jus leave u wit that ugly polo
im rockin dolo
and as far as the dough go
its scrapin the ceilin like a balloon
fag peels so many bananas call him baboon
u rap buffoon, u jus a bite 4 me i dun even need a spoon
gettin rid of the trash so call me garbage disposal
make ur ass crash now ur whip is totalled
u jus exploded in a ball of flame
and i dun showed yall y i deserve to b in the rap hall of fame

U in da hall of fame??
watta fuck u saying, u aint got no game
u must be insane,something wrong wit yo brain
u betta duck, cuz us a sittin duck
u juss ran outta luck
cuz im snipin of every lil emcee
like u fake ass wannabe
im terminating, eleminating
turn da sound up n my head gyrating
im spinnin like crazy, my rhymes spin of like Jay-z
we can battle wit raps, or we can battle wit gats
im kill all u kats
Mak $ay us a child, ur flavors a lil mild
my shit is hot, ill finish u right on da spot
u at the bottom, im at da top
im like an Eminem n us a Papa doc

after that last rap, we all kno who one
and whos number two
jus a fake ass thug w nthn better to do
im better than u
better than u'll ever b
when it comes to cheddar
u cant even come close to my salary
smokin on the celery
socal piece of shit go back to ur hills beverly
call me pointdexter cuz i rhyme cleverly
put on some locs, cuz im the brightest u'll ever c
after hearin say spit he at loss for words
jus stand there and stare like an art gallery
chubby piece of shit lay off the calories

daniel872 wrote:U in da hall of fame??
watta fuck u saying, u aint got no game
u must be insane,something wrong wit yo brain
u betta duck, cuz us a sittin duck
u juss ran outta luck
cuz im snipin of every lil emcee
like u fake ass wannabe
im terminating, eleminating
turn da sound up n my head gyrating
im spinnin like crazy, my rhymes spin of like Jay-z
we can battle wit raps, or we can battle wit gats
im kill all u kats
Mak $ay us a child, ur flavors a lil mild
my shit is hot, ill finish u right on da spot
u at the bottom, im at da top
im like an Eminem n us a Papa doc

u snipin every mc?
new bitch u aint ready fa da beast
cuz im here and u just wanna be
use ya rhymes against ya cuz u too weak
let me show u how to use da rhymes u use.
and im da terminator
and u just a lil kid,meet da eliminator
i got ya head spinnings like crazy
u aint no where near jay z
ya rank is nowhere near 0 cuz u too lazy
u lame ass freestyler u cant replace me
my flavor is mild
u tryed to rap,but u still a child
u talk softer den a little girl
and u cant come to my world
cuz im one of da freestyling gods and u just a weak ass nigga
u like eminem?wat u been smoking pot?
i'd hate to be u,so ill be papa doc
cuz u just a lonely rock
wit a dry ass cock
no homo,but i got hoes on dock

kt lil boy, and wanksta ass daniel
do the tv and flip on to my channel
yall rhymes TVY7 mine stay mature
self proclaimed professor professin his lecture
ur flow smooth? well mine has texture
rhyme wit perfection belong to the prefecture
my skillz beyond measure
cuz evrytime i spit, gold treasure
guess that means ima pirate
so call me flying dutchman
cuz im flyin off that dutch, man

dont even need to go further...step ya game up