No Friends

This just some old topical I had lying around... Topic was "No Friends" and of course I took it to a different level

Let me know whatcha thinkin'

aight?


NO FRIENDS
By Word.Smyth


I don't have friends. I don't need them.
They just deceive you and leave you bleedin
take you for everything and leave you defeated
i don't need it - ME is all I ever needed
friends - the very concept makes me sick to my stomach
pretending to care when in reality you just wantin something
you get what you want and you forget all about this friendship
fuck that pretend shit - your so-called "friendship"'s offencive
don't even say shit to me, don't look at me, don't even grin
don't pretend to be friendly - bitch - i got an ak-47
and i aint afraid to to use it... fucking haters need to die
they all need to die - cause they all liars - all they can do is lie
leave me alone - don't tell me you care - you don't - go away
I don't need no fake-ass friends fucking with me ... ima blow em away
Today. That's what Ima do - fucking yea, what I got to lose anyway?
Time to make them pay - make my day hearin them scream in pain
take my AK fully loaded and go take care of those so called friends
take as many out as I can before the Popo puts an end to my statement
That's it. My minds made up. So I guess this song is like the end
Last thing I write before I finally get to sleep the sleep of death
with my last stroke of the pen let me just say again cause it needs to be said
I hate all you motherfuckers out there - fuck you all - fuck friends.

nice work on this one word...good emotions and imagery..flow waas a lil choppy but all in all 8/10

Liked it, had a good angle on the topic...
Vivid detail on the subject and I felt the emotion... Decent...
Overall flow was aiight, some bar ends were a little iffy, but in general... it fit together nicely... "imperfect" rhymes were kind of flimsy, too... but like I said - overall this was good.

7.9 / 10

~ Stay Up, Fam. ~