My Dilemma

Is everyone changing
or is it just me
because as far as i can see
i have a new destiny
need more time
I want to be the guy on her mind
want to go back in time
wish i could press rewind
tryin to repress how i feel
know i will never get what I want
so im gonna have to deal
I have failed my mission
prenounce me dead at the collision
life going through a transition
no more self ambition
life itself
has me stuck in submission
stuck at a dead end
with no place to turn
she will never be with me
and thats something ive got to learn
in order to succeed
you must thrive
Im walking around
but its like im not even alive
cant get her out of my mind
I would still be able to see her
even if I was blind
People would say I have an obsession
but at this moment in time
Im dealing with depression
I hope the pain will lessen
living is a real mess
the situation im in
causes me to much stress
searching for answers in my head
just shoot me now
Id rather be dead
have been told to play the game right
feel knocked out
in the 1st round of the fight
dont think she understands how i feel
my life is a lion
and im its meal
deal or no deal
either way i lose
run out of decisions
nothing left to choose
need to take time and figure out what i should do
want the world to know i want to be with you

dat was pretty good...u write how i write wit my personal ish...and ya format is how i use 2 format my ish...lol

itz like looking n a mirror...lol...

4 what it was...it was aiiight...more of a poetry feel 2 me tho...stretch ya vocab a bit...we get n2 da habit of using da same words over...thesaurus's and dictionaryz are thick because there are many words 2 b played wit...lol...and then we have other languages...so jus get creative wit it...da worst anybody can ever say is dat it was bad ya kno...and not everybody is gonna feel a piece...naa mean...so da more u twist...and flip stuff...play wit meanings...and pronunciation...da better u get...and da sooner...da faster u get better...


it was pretty good...like i said b4...depression and all dat suckz ass...hope it was an old piece...and u good now...lol...but if dis is current...don't sweat her homes...dats life...when dey say there are a million fish n da sea...they ain't lie~n...and they say life is short...but when it comes 2 girls...itz pretty long...you'll b surprised how many girls feel u...and dig u...if u focus on u 1st...stress is a motha...but if u let it get 2 u...dat when u become 1 of da motherz itz uck~n...


stay up...and stick wit it


ghostttt

Ya it is a recent piece. I'm new to all of this, as you can tell. I like writing based on my emotion and what is going on in my life.
Thank you for your advice, I will put it to use in my work. Thank you my dude