Who Jd im white like patrick swayze but i aint dead rhymes still crazy

Hey everyone i do this rhyming stuff for fun when im lifted ( ya dig) or crunk of the beer dems. I'm from Toronto, Ontario the great white north Canada ya dig lol. I guess its time to drop some bars....
On the grind the aquire cars drinkin till we see stars time to travel the world on the yahct the dutchies get twirled we made it hustlin no spottin only makin money new ways
stay plottin and spottin the weaknesses in the game/ till they get addicted to the lyrical frame of mind keep em far left behind / My nephew gettin older growin up more colder cuz his pops
give him the colder but he continues on liftin the boulder/ He broke out this cold mould and the story starts to be told/ Hustin the music starts to get sold/ new beats he never gets old till he moves on
confidence gettin bold/ Hes now livin like an actor in a motion picture for followin the g scripture keep it real only close fam no ripture with your blood friends help em understand the master plan/
we'll all make it chosen like the son of sam/ the gift has arosen time to get on the grind/
if you seek you will find livin life like the ghetto bible violence through survival makin cheese takin out any rival
They try to test and come near we will approach and squish this roach our strength comes very clear our words will be sincere when they/
in vegestative state only thinkin of their dears
loved ones and forgotten sons taken by the guns mistaken for havin funds

I'm just starting out so if anyone could give me a few pointers thatd be great ty

When our temper awaken mcc leave em broken and shakin because they had a hand in participatin
they were stealin and concealin other habits that werent sunny
so we approached no funny no joke like steve erkil on the real family matters/
try to hurt like mirrors when it shatters

its ok to just be starting off-better than alot of these people on this site.hope you didn't steal those rhymes, but if you did not,then that's good.but some advice: use something to split up the bars, don't just keep rapping without letting us know where a rhyme ended or where a bar ended.but that's good.keep it up. just rap from what's inside of you.and even if you don't feel like rapping, you should rap everyday or every 3 days if you want to get better.that's what i do even when im tired.but yeah-people be aware- Crackstilldenyrealfly-is in the building.hope u stay active and write alot.see u soon and let me know if you want to battle.