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    Post by Shook Ones Back On Up Sun Aug 30, 2009 4:01 pm

    Im Calling Any Body Out Anything Goes You Think You Got Guts CoME oN


    Instrumental Is Paid IN Full
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    Post by Verse2 Fri Sep 04, 2009 12:46 pm

    ((chorus said 1 time))

    Shook ones/
    u shook son/
    da knight takes ya rook~done/
    do u like dude did 2 Suge/
    dis da hook son/

    Shook ones/
    u need 2 back ya ass up/
    4 i smack dat ass up/
    **SIT** class has jus begun/

    ***okay***

    Pardon my philosphy/
    but lames what he's gotta b/
    if dis Mortal kombat/
    he begged 4 da babality/
    he called/
    i raised/
    he folded/
    game played properly/
    he shoulda jus sat up da board 2 play monoply/
    speak~n astralogy/
    homes we ain't compatible/
    shoulda read da tarot cards/
    woulda seen da 2 battle thru/
    lines dats strung along 2 baffle u/
    u jus another 1 herded along/
    not careful (of) what he wished~4/
    2Pac n his pic must b from da west/
    u get n2 dat izzle~fashizzle/
    i'll choke u 2 death/
    talk cheese/
    den i'm poke~n u next/
    aww shitttt/
    i'ma ruff ryder/
    anybody like Swizz/ (swiss)lol
    he asked 4 dis/
    so he's paid~n~full/
    red target on his head/
    got da attention of da bull/
    detention n da morgue/
    fuck a battle on wax/
    i'ma light da candle/
    ask ya mom 4 da match/(lol)
    he only thirt~een/
    need a growth spurt seems/
    he's a young bow wow/
    but it ain't work~ing/ (lol)
    sneak~n watch~n girls~gone~wild/
    naa mean/
    he wanna rap now dat
    Debbie dumped em 4 matt/
    wowwww
    he like why~girls~seem~so~foul???!/
    i jus wanna es~cape from all da world right now/
    hit up some forums/
    gain some lyrical style/
    dis 2 easy a spanking/
    easily wearing em down


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    Shook ones/
    u shook son/
    checkmate~overlooked em/
    did u like dude did 2 Suge/
    dis da hook son/

    Shook ones/
    u need 2 back ya ass up/
    4 i smack dat ass up/
    **STAND** class is now done/

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    Shook ones/
    u shook son/
    checkmate~overlooked em/
    did u like dude did 2 Suge/
    dis da hook son/

    Shook ones/
    u need 2 back ya ass up/
    4 i smack dat ass up/
    **STAND** class is now done/


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    Post by Shook Ones Back On Up Sat Sep 05, 2009 9:51 am

    Verse 2 this is your last verse/
    How did you even make it to the 2nd Verse/
    Jus cuz pac's in my picture don't mean i'm from the west/
    i'm from the east im from jersey/ you ain't wrothey to wear my jersey/
    tupac's my idol/ you just a black william hung from americia idol/
    she's bang, she, bang/ well verse 2 jus like krs-one watch my 9mm go bang/
    yea i'm thirteen i don't need a growth spurt/
    you claim your philosophy thinks i'm lame but you don't even match your name verse 2
    verse 2 should'nt be your name maybe verse 1/
    scratch dat ur done your name should be verse was'nt nothing done/
    and Debbie ain't dump me for matt/
    you ai'nt gonna light no candle, because i'm going to light the candle with your moms
    match/
    your the candle i'm going to melt your match/
    hey homeboy you just met your match/
    it's your birthday i blew out your flame/
    the rap has to many playas you should'nt be in this game/
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    Post by Verse2 Sat Sep 05, 2009 11:27 pm

    okay
    ya rhyme didn't even really go wit da beat/
    so ya rhythm must be off/
    and no/
    dats not unique/
    he say he from jersey/
    den mispelled "worthy"/
    dis a open and shut case homes/
    bring n da ju~ry/
    sca~rey/
    think~n dis a dude who wanna rap/
    and wit 16 bars/
    could even barely do dat/
    there ain't a man betta/
    u got a Van~detta/ (vendetta)
    i got dat Hulk strength
    dat make it so u can't get up/
    u need help/
    better call n da marines/
    see i'm even play~n nice/
    couldn't beat me n ya dreams/
    dis time no curses/
    promise 2 keep it clean/
    jus cuz u under age dog/
    u only thirteen/
    u rhymed "match" 3 times/
    yes, homie 3 lines/
    u wanna learn da ropes/
    best advice is 2 read mines/
    posted urs/
    posta boi/
    3 minutes to 9/
    let me find u skipping school/
    and i'ma con~tact ya momz/
    dis is *Verse2*/
    and dis Verse~2/
    da nail~n~da~coffin/
    da pay~per~view/
    de~flamed by dude/
    bet V/
    dats me/
    not u/
    and dats why he gett~n ate like a peanut chew/
    a disgrace 2 Eric B and Rakim/
    dey like V?/
    why u even wanna try him?!!/
    homie You're you/
    obv~iously u're not him/
    i think he needs salute/(solution)
    cuz dis here is a problem/
    2 Wz get F'd by da poss/ (WWF)&(posse)
    he says "real men wear skirts"/
    like thrasher and Mosh/
    Verse u done a heck of a job/
    u're such a baby sitter/
    yea/well if dats da case
    den u should pay a n!&&@/(lmao)
    merc em/
    maybe rip em/
    but i think 1st i should find out da age of his baby sister/(lol)


    got tired...i was gonna get alil deeper further on...and go n on ya boi 2pac...but got sleepy...i'll do dat wit da next 1

    da good...i like dat u tried 2 get personal...very good...gett~n n2 da fact dat we're both n jersey...and i liked dat u tried 2 flip my stuff...and tried 2 use it against me...i liked dat u gave it some length...and didn't get n2 da gay jokes...

    da bad is u used alot of da same words 2 rhyme...n da rap world u can't really do dat...u can do it once n a blue moon...like far as double meanings and all dat...but u wanna try and refrain from dat as much as possible...ya kno...my best advice is listen 2 ya fave rapper...and see how he formats his stuff..da words he uses...slang terms...try and broad~n ur word scope...use words not used commonly....when u think of a line...try and think 4 lines n advance...dat way u can think of da punch u want 2 throw....kno what i mean...i'm not gonna sit here and preach...jus wanta help u get better...u a young un...i'd b a jerk if i didn't


    get at me witcha best


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    Post by Shook Ones Back On Up Sun Sep 06, 2009 11:53 am

    Verse 2 your still rapping after the last verse
    seem like i have 2 do some more work
    i'm Dr. Shook Ones Back On Up
    i'm looking into your mouth all of yours rhymes are all eff-ed up
    get ready 4 your rhymes to leave in a body bag today
    bout 2 lay your rhymes 2 rest so listen what i have to say
    time to sit down kid go back to school
    because this is only the beginning when i'm done your going 2 b a fool


    So What About The Rhyme not rhyming to the beat
    you just using an excuse because you know your about to be beat
    you're a microphone fiend but a bad type
    my music is dope you just can't wait till i roc the mic
    and what do you have against my man pac
    your mic is skinny it's a slim jim
    i'm king cobra i spit venow
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    Post by Verse2 Mon Sep 07, 2009 11:32 pm

    i'ma make dis short and sweet/
    and even more discreet/
    cuz u jus da help/
    so quick open da door 4 me/
    maybe da valet/
    but u can't even reach da seat/
    so u crash my car/
    and it'll b a demon u meet/
    2pac was kool/
    but also a dumb fool/
    being an ass on camera/
    was really a bad move/
    and dats why he ended up shot/
    u piss off da world/
    and da world will pay u back/
    like it or not/
    thug life he preached/
    plugged twice he getz/
    u seen all of what he reaped/
    and what he sowed u won't 4get/
    i jus wrote this/
    cuz i know dat u were wait~n/
    and if u are like me/
    den u prolly was lose~n patience/
    me i'm gett~n sleepy/
    and i'm goin 2 bed/
    after i merc u/
    feel free 2 vote Verse2 4 prez


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    Post by Shook Ones Back On Up Tue Sep 08, 2009 5:13 pm

    what is the good and bad from my raps and did i improve
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    Post by Verse2 Tue Sep 08, 2009 8:49 pm

    da good...always best 2 do da good 1st...

    i didn't read dat 1 with da beat...but i wanna start by say~n...dat it had a steady flow...

    very nice

    ***Verse applauds*** lol

    and ya content was alil weak...but it was much better den b4...




    u still need a bit of work...but itz a deff step n da right direction


    *bar break down*

    Verse 2 your still rapping after the last verse
    seem like i have 2 do some more work

    ^da 3 things about dis dat i ain't like were...
    1) ~u started ur verse b4 dis 1 very similarly
    2) ~(last verse~and some more work) / don't really rhyme well
    (i mean yea...work and verse rhyme...but da syllables count 2)
    3) ~not a really strong open~n...kno what i mean...


    'm Dr. Shook Ones Back On Up
    i'm looking into your mouth all of yours rhymes are all eff-ed up

    ^dat was an aiight line...but i think if u woulda used lines...instead of rhymes...u coulda gave it da double~meaning...as far as say~n my teeth...and my rap lines were f'd up...naa mean...but still aiight...jus try and give it alil more thought next time...naa mean



    get ready 4 your rhymes to leave in a body bag today
    bout 2 lay your rhymes 2 rest so listen what i have to say

    ^again flow was kool...still jus da content need~n work...again much better den b4...but
    i think u set ur first line up 4 a killer follow thru...but instead u turned it n2 a filler...

    coulda said sumth~n along da lines follow~n da body bag 2day
    like:

    get ready 4 your rhymes to leave in a body bag today
    zip it up and throw it off da dockz/watch it sag away

    it wasn't great...but it woulda gave da 1st line alil more oomph...

    time to sit down kid go back to school
    because this is only the beginning when i'm done your going 2 b a fool

    ^aiiight...still content dats a bit basic

    but jus keep at it...jus try and stay away from da generic stuff...u wanna use unorthodox comparisons...u gotta get n2 da habit of use~n punchlines...i feel like they're a bit overrated myself...but itz key n a battle...and itz like basketball...u can b good...but you'll never b a fan favorite unless u can do a trick or 2...maybe a dunk...or a cross~over...dats why most teams have a star player whose good at da fundamentals...and can do a trick 2 get em 2 say ooooh...da role players are good at what dey do...but dats all they're there 4...role play~n...cuz dey can't get da ooohs...dey can jus ball...naa mean


    aso u wanna sastart trynna intergrate some punches n ya lines...even small 1s...like...

    i leave em green n da face like green eggs and ham...lol...wack...but itz a punchline...and dat was quick and easy 2 come up wit...da more u do it...like da more u do anything...da better u get at it...and den soon u can get more deep wit it...and den start connect~n punches 2gether...

    i would do 1 now...but i'm actually pretty tired and should b n da bed right now...lol...but i wanted 2 make sure i helped u alil bit naa mean...hopefully i ain't make dat 2 long...and if u read all of it...

    good look~n out...jus practice wit da flow and punchlines 4 a while...grasp da fundamentals...and you'll b better den da mediocres...and dat'll give u da confidence and resolve 2 keep at it and sky rocket wit it


    aiiight homie


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    Post by Shook Ones Back On Up Wed Sep 09, 2009 6:47 pm

    aigghtt homie i'm gonna practice on fri night n sat cuz i got skool but i will practice by going against the top rappers in the game now like lil wayne or souja boy
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    Post by Verse2 Wed Sep 09, 2009 8:21 pm

    no prob homie...i'm jus glad 2 help...whenever u wanna go at it...jus leave some lines...and i'll follow up or whatever...however i can help jus let me kno...i gotchu...stay up...and u better b doin good n school...lol...but whenever u want me 2 check sumth~n out jus let me kno...dats what i'm here 4...and i wanna make it known...dat i ain't da best...by any margin...and n my eyes...i'm not really dat good...i jus have a small grasp 2 da fundamentals and music...i'm noth~n spectacular...i'm jus like u...still come~n up n da game...i'm jus pass~n on da things dat i've learned from my experiences...and da lil bit i kno...hopefully helps u...lol...but whenever u want somebody 2 read ya stuff jus hit me up...and i gotchu


    stay up homie


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    Post by Verse2 Wed Sep 09, 2009 8:24 pm

    but on some p.s. ish


    i don't think soulja boy really counts as a dude goin against da top niggas...lol...well n da sense dat he had 2 go against alot of critisism from alot of diff people...mainly include~n rap peers...and still stayed doin his thing...i guess u could say dat den

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