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    biggs907
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    written rap

    Post by biggs907 on Sun Jul 26, 2009 12:09 am

    as i go in flowin like the wind blowin droppin bombs/up a hundred to zip in the fourth pour it on/ dont trip i'll flip you'll drip barrel drawn/ make a log i'm a dog/ straight shittin on ya lawn/you say no brown spots for u dog/oh well howdy hoo howdy doo how ya do/da blamma' turn u clam niggas in to chowder soup/riding low in the coupe no roof/divorced/ mobbin for the alamony never phony of course/so never force the issue/keep cleanex and ya tissue/aint nobody gon'miss you/ when i body you with the lines/leave you cryin' like a bitch do/and you know im a patient/pullin proper placed pen made flows out da looney bin hoe/ afro

    SpitItReal27
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    Re: written rap

    Post by SpitItReal27 on Sun Jul 26, 2009 7:14 pm

    Hmm, interesting lines you're spittin at the time
    Yea, you got some lyricism, and got some rhyme
    Guess my only advice is to have some reason
    Keep an idea, focus, and it'll be more appealin'
    Just cause a word rhymes, don't try to use force
    When you write rap or poetry, flow should not be coerced
    Nor rehearsed, or reversed
    But keep it flowin steady, never come worse to worse
    But again, I do leave you a compliment on your try
    Read some stuff on here, and learn how to be fly


    ...Basically, it was a good read and some of your lines made some solid sense, but I kind of felt like I was losin your power, which might be cause of the jumpin around of topics... just read up on some stuff on here or other sites and you'll start finding your own style and what works for you...

    biggs907
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    Posts: 17
    Join date: 2009-07-22
    Age: 24
    Location: Anchorage,AK

    Re: written rap

    Post by biggs907 on Tue Aug 04, 2009 10:40 pm

    Thanks for the feed back...your not too bad ur self how long u been writing.

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