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    Fragile Chaos

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    SpitItReal27
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    Fragile Chaos

    Post by SpitItReal27 on Fri May 29, 2009 3:43 pm

    Twisted and broken yet so complex
    Indescribable, unpredicatable, fluid to the next
    Burdened by the pressure, victim to its power
    Losing perspective and drive within the final hour
    Tragedy, you've shown your misshapen face again
    Claim to be my friend
    Magnitude of about ten
    Leaving me clueless, but then...
    I cannot change what has been
    Nor can I decide what will become
    But holding on is so difficult
    Knowing I've lost, instead of won
    So easy to lose focus, lose sight
    To take the right move, keep up the fight
    The internal battle within the console of my mind
    A solution, oh please, that I'll never find
    Expectations all around, wish and desire
    Why can't I just quit, get myself fired
    Instead I continue to go against what I tell myself
    Listening to the words of no one else
    But who can in this ordeal
    Me, myself, all the mess that I feel
    Perhaps a bit general, a bit too plain
    But the words above, that's how it is in my brain
    Mixed up and stirred together
    Wish it could flow just a little bit better
    To be brief and summarize all the pain that I know
    Wow, there's no point, cause who wants to hear about the low
    Maybe the substance of my phrases are still held within
    To be revealed at the final hour, both deeds and sin
    Again, so intricate are the thoughts that I hold
    A fragile chaos indeed, thought in bold
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    Tiny bagz
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    Re: Fragile Chaos

    Post by Tiny bagz on Fri Aug 28, 2009 11:28 am

    g.....thts reel good homie...Real GOOD!! Idea send it to poem contest online

    SpitItReal27
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    Re: Fragile Chaos

    Post by SpitItReal27 on Wed Sep 02, 2009 12:16 pm

    Comment is much appreciated...

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    Re: Fragile Chaos

    Post by D Light on Wed Sep 02, 2009 2:05 pm

    its was a good poem i wasnt wowed by it thought you can bring more but i got the message

    SpitItReal27
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    Re: Fragile Chaos

    Post by SpitItReal27 on Wed Sep 02, 2009 2:09 pm

    Yea, no real wow factor in it, but honestly I wrote it so long ago, I forgot it was even here... lol -- so I didn't think it was too bad, but I've stepped up my game since then, I guess you could say.

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    Re: Fragile Chaos

    Post by Libp108 on Wed Oct 07, 2009 3:51 pm

    ayo bagz u a bitch nigga

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