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    lil poetry
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    what i feel

    Post by lil poetry on Thu Aug 21, 2008 5:02 am

    Thinking of you gets me shivering
    ladies donít think you the only ones to get hurt
    like a turtle itíll take something special to get our emotions out
    you did that but without explanation you also put the flame out
    i know this has been said before but you werenít like any other girl
    you dressed different and smelt different
    nothing to overpowering and didnít dress to get attention
    and all the guys still liked you, drooling at your feet
    the attention didnít get to you as you still acted sweet
    this made all the fake plastic girls jealous of you
    and every guy wanting to wake up next to you
    the beauty is the choice was yours
    and in our heart you saw me as yours
    been waiting to be happy for years
    and all it took were your eyes to make me smile
    finding happiness after all these year was worthwhile
    i still remember the look on your face to when i shouted out your name
    iíd never been that happy and all my previous girls combined cudnt do the same
    many stars full of pocket came along but you ddnt care about the fame
    leading me to believe that true love conquers all
    but everything no matter how great has to fall
    for every beginning there is always an end
    the devil will strike those with something to die for
    its like our love packed its bags and walked out the door
    no explanation, not a word less, not a word more
    just woke up one morning and the picture frame was empty
    all i have are the glorious memories
    closing my eyes and picturing you in my dreams
    but i guess nothing is ever what it seems
    some people say you werenít happy and needed out
    some say you cudnt believe it had lasted this long
    your previous relationships werenít always as strong
    which made you wonder whether you were good enough for me
    you said you needed to clear your head
    but we both know things arenít gonna be the same now
    weíve both shown doubt and lack of trust
    maybe its best to go our separate ways and just remember the good times
    wen ever im feeling down all i gotta do is add your name in all my rhymes
    never thought the day would come for us to say our goodbyes
    but you are always with me whenever i close my eyes.

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    Re: what i feel

    Post by SpitItReal27 on Fri May 29, 2009 3:24 pm

    lol, I know obviously, I'm not that girl in your poem, but I put a little somethin together just as a reply... enjoy

    To clear my head was my excuse
    My reason to leave, my reason to breathe, my reason to go seemed like abuse
    Left you aside, to retreat to the world
    But see, you left your mark on this one girl
    So simple was I, so plain I tried to be
    The dudes at my feet, that wasn't my scene
    But see you came along and a nuance in thought
    The passion and appreciation, were truly the pieces you brought
    To have someone close, to have someone there
    You were that one and you made it so clear
    Perhaps the reason I left was because it was so strong
    To see it reversed, would make me feel wrong
    Saying goodbye was the lie that I had to use
    But really, to stay, I still would have to lose
    Looking back now, walking away was so hard
    Seems like I should have hit, taken one more card
    In my game of blackjack, I could have had 21
    But I let go, I stopped, and baby, I had to run
    Not from you, not from the compassion
    But ran from the power, the possible dissatisfaction
    All we've got now are those simple memories
    But when I'm feelin sick of being apart, they are my remedies
    So when you lay back and think of those happy days
    Know I'm thinking to, of you in so many ways

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    Re: what i feel

    Post by Verse2 on Sun May 31, 2009 3:37 pm

    WHAT DA FREAK!!!!!!!

    mAN I WISH I COULD WRITE POETRY....
    Y'ALL GOT ME ON MY ISH NOW LIKE NAS SAID....
    I'MA WRITE SUMTH~N....
    not now....(Verse whimperz....)
    but i will.....soooon.....mwaaahaahaa Sad

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    Re: what i feel

    Post by SpitItReal27 on Sun May 31, 2009 5:33 pm

    lol, well when you get to writing
    Malke sure you clear your mind
    By that I mean, put it in words
    And take your time

    Empty the contents of your heart and soul
    Write out everything, nothing you can hold
    Don't stress over the rhyming
    Void all the useless timing
    Simply phrase how you feel
    Then indeed, poetry is the real deal

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